short film animatic, 4

Here's the latest animatic of my story. I hope you enjoy! (If you see anything that can be improved, don't hesitate to let me know!!).

short film animatic, 2

Dear World and all that inhabit it,
Here's a revision of the animatic, based on the feedback I received. Any thoughts?

I recently received notes telling me that the injured character in the beginning gives away the ending, and that the ending is anti-climatic. I agree with both comments and plan to make adjustments as soon as I think of something better!

Your wisdom is always appreciated!

short film animatic, 1

So this is the current animatic for my short film. I would really appreciate any and all feedback! 'Looking good' comments are appreciated, but I would really like to hear ways of cutting out the garbage.
I have a couple of concerns. One is the jester is not introduced in a way that we can feel for him immediately. The other huge issue is that not everyone gets the payoff.
Soooo, hopefully somebody is reading this! =)